Peer Response

Peer Response:
I think you don´t have a coplete topic sentence, I mean one sentence that introduce your paragraph, the things you´re going to talk about. As soon as I start reading I´ve imagine how your friend is, so this is a good point. Maybe you should write about her physical and then talk about her personality. For example: In your first sentence you talk about her hair and her eyes, in the second one you say she is smart and in the fourth you´re talking again about her body. I like that you have appointed the things you most like of her, I supposed these are things that make you feel comfortable and it´s something important when you are trying to describe someone you like. The last thing I have to say after seeing this is that you should put a concluding sentence, something beautiful about her.

Final text
My best friend is a girl of golden hair and freen eyes. She is skinny but not short to be a girl. She is very smart and always know what to do or say. She is quite loyal aand you can trust on her. I donn´t know how but she is always right, She has always understood me and support when I need it, give me advise and help me when I asked for it. I admire her for her strengh and determination, and I cant imagine my life without her.